Feedback-a-thon

[teaonthestairs]

The wonderful shadesofbrixton set up a Feedback-a-thon and I luckily got siryn99 who just blow me away with her beautiful writing, I must say that I'm not too good at feedback - I tend to gush and rarely have anything constructive to say so I must apologise to siryn99 who deserved so much more - girl your writing rocks and I can't wait to read more.

siryn99 writes a whole lot of fandoms and I had a look at most of them (barring Lost which I haven't seen and The OC (which I don't watch often) so there's Harry Potter, BtVS/LotR, Angel, Firefly, Alias and Pirates of the Caribbean.

Title: Elegy (The Slow Like Honey Remix)
Fandom: Harry Potter
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Remus/Hermione, implied

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/79439.html

Elegy is one of those fics that just stun you in their simple but wonderful way of getting the characters emotion across. Hermione’s reflections on her and Remus’s relationship, on Remus himself are so true to their characters. They is so many sentences I love but my favourite would have to be

//His hands always smelled like books – ink, parchment, and worn leather. To her it was a comforting smell, like the library at Hogwarts or the study downstairs. It was like coming home. He was home to her.//

okay its more then a sentence rather it’s a small paragraph but gah! I have a serious love for hands, they say so much about a persons character and my goodness that sentence is just gah! Perfect.

 

Title: Toe In The Water…

Fandom: BtVS/LotR

Pairing/Characters: Haldir/Tara

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/21545.html

 

I must admit I have a certain weakness for a good crossover and my goodness is this a good crossover – only 200 words but the shortness suits it. I love the style of writing – there’s a certain silence to it, its peaceful – okay that sounded weird but it’s the only way I can think to explain it, Siryn you say more with the words you aren’t saying then with words you are. Once again with the absolute perfectness. 

 

Title: Confession

Fandom: Angel

Rating: PG-13

Characters: Wesley, Faith.

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/41198.html

 

I don’t read much Angel fic, in fact I haven‘t read any in years but I loved this one from the first paragraph, or sentence or whatever you want to call it.

 /P>

//In his long line of foolish ideas and ill-prepared plans, this one might have been the worst. He should have known this wasn't going to work out. Nothing ever does, he supposed.//

 

As well as a hand freak I like words and Siryn, my goodness woman you just have a genius way with them, every word you write seems to fit perfectly, sentences bleed character. Plus in the above sentence I just adore the words ‘foolish ideas and ill-prepared plans’, call me crazy but they just scream Wes.

 

I love the awkward tension between him and Faith, the pauses and subtle use of description that make this such a this such a powerful story.

 

// I wanted to hurt you, to make you feel as worthless and used as I did. I wanted to break you into pieces. Because I didn't think you ever knew what that felt like, to think you were nothing.//

 

You have an excellent grip on Faith’s character; I love the lines above and how they show so much of Faith and also of Faith’s connection (not quite the word I’m looking for but it will have to do) with Wes.

 

I so hope you make this longer – flesh it out somewhat because it’s such an excellent fic.

Title: In Dreams
Fandom: Firefly
Rating: PG-13

 

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/60040.html

 

I haven’t read Firefly fic before so this was certainly a new experience, a very enjoy experience. I love River’s voice and the dream imagery, and I adore how you describe the dreams, my favourite is most certainly

 

//Inside the shuttle, Inara sleeps more dreamlessly than the others, only the occasional thread spinning into to her mind.//

 

I love the imagery that a sentence invokes and it very much fits Inara’s character.

 

Title: After Dinner

Fandom: Alias
Rating: PG

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/32215.html

 

Will! How could I resist – I love how you captured his innocence and his energy, and his all round Willness which is good because you know, its about Will. Love the lines

 

//"Nothing, just for being you. The tie thing was kind of sweet in a weird, slightly insane way. But that's what I like about you,"//  

 

It’s so quirky and excellent and dare I say cute? Cos it was – very cute.

 

//As for the broom closet, he and Weiss had a bet as to which one Kendall was going to find them in first.//

 

Hee! I love the fact that Weiss and Will are friends, I would have loved to see it more on screen but I think you captured what I would hope it would be perfectly here.

 

All round an excellent Will fic, great work! 

 

Oh and I giggled over you’re A/N – you are so right – its just so frustrating when you watch it.

 

Title: Blue Heaven
Fandom: Alias
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Sydney/Weiss

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/104753.html

 

Siryn you are a genius! You use such beautiful images to display the subtle, awkward elegance of Sydney in a beautifully written Weiss POV piece. The opening sentences are captivating and gorgeous.

 

//The streetlight shining through the curtains tints his sheets an indigo blue and her skin is pale against it, like fragile bone china. But he knows she is anything but fragile.//

 

Excellent drabble.

 

Title: Before The Storm
Fandom: Harry Potter
Rating: PG-13, for strong images
Pairing: Vague hints of Hermione/Draco UST

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/75978.html

 

I usually steer clear of any sort of Draco/Hermione fics, I find them at best unrealistic but I must admit I quite enjoyed this one. I liked the fact that it was from Hermione’s perspective, she is an excellent choice for the storytelling role simply because she acts mostly with honesty and logic and I think you put this to excellent use in this fic. You had her character down pat and her interaction with Draco was excellently dialogued.

 

//"You should know that if you betray us, I'll hunt you down and flay you limb from limb."//

 

Made me giggle as violence usually does – once agin with the excellent work.

 

Title: The Knight Steps Aside
Author: Siryn – siryn99@hotmail.com
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: James/Elizabeth

 

http://www.livejournal.com/users/siryn99/48033.html

 

Another first for me, I have never been interested in reading a PotC fic but I had a quick look and was soon enthralled – Very bittersweet and beautifully written, I loved their interaction and the dialogue – favourite line

 

//When the music stopped he released her, but she had captured him.//

 

I just love the structure of the words. Beautifully done.   

Comments

[siryn99.livejournal.com]

Oh my God! Thank you so much. You are too kind. I am so glad you liked Elegy. It's one of my personal favorites, mostly because of the bit you quoted. That was the first thing I wrote and pretty much framed the entire story around those three sentences. Shh! It's a secret. ;)

Anyway, thanks again for the great reviews. :)

[rosiew.livejournal.com]

thats okaydokey - your stories so deserve many reviews and so much more. I'm going to friend you because as stated above you rock.